Thank you in advance for your feedback!
COVEN OF ASH AND FLAME is a YA Contemporary Fantasy novel complete at 91,000 words with series potential. My manuscript will appeal to those who love the witty voice and forbidden romance of Crave
by Tracy Wolff and the reluctant heroine and fragmented fantasy world of Sara Holland’s Havenfall
Sixteen-year-old Jenna Grant can't seem to keep the fires under control. It’s hard to enjoy a simple speed date when there’s a chance she’ll set her charming date aflame—which she did. It’s even harder when everyone watching is calling her a freak. Love the voice in this opening!
Maybe they’ve got a point. After a beast attacks Jenna in the middle of a forest fire she caused, she discovers that she is the final member of a dying race of fire warriors. Together with four other covens, the Fire Coven is tasked with keeping the elements in line. As the only one who can save her people, Jenna must endure death-defying trials alongside new allies from her coven to revive her race and prevent apocalyptic natural disasters. How do these trials revive her race and what is causing the apocalyptic disasters? You might not need to explain all of it but maybe add more about this?
When an elemental catastrophe puts her innocent brother in the hospital, she has no choice but to pursue the only relic powerful enough to save him and her people: the Fire Opal. That is, if the rogue leader of the dark matter wielders (who are these people? More like, how do they relate to Jenna)
doesn’t find it first. She embarks on her cross-country quest with flame sword in-tow, navigating coven rivalries and resisting a forbidden attraction to her sworn protector. Finding the stone will save the earth (How? Again, you don't need to fully explain but maybe a bit more here?)
and her brother, but Jenna’s evolution into a coven warrior may destroy any hope of returning to the world she calls home.
Thank you for your time and consideration,
Julia AlexandraThis is a great start! Maybe just a bit more expanding, but overall nice job!