YA Science Fantasy Queens of Next Year Feb 14, 2020 13:18:38 GMT -5
Post by loretta on Feb 14, 2020 13:18:38 GMT -5
Burgundy Iridescence has mere hours to find her sister Reesha’s memory book before the rogue memories that escaped it steal her twin’s identity forever. Intriguing hook!
Like most girls who live in the Diamond Guild, Burgundy keeps a memory book. When she creates her memory entry each night, she doesn’t write about school drama or dead-end dates. Instead, she retells a memory she has never experienced, six months into the future, where she witnesses her sister’s funeral. I tripped up here for a moment, wondering if this happened once or over and over, until I moved to the next paragraph.
For two months, it’s the same memory, every night, until one day she meets the supposedly-dangerous Millennial, the time keeper. She tells her she must record every detail of her memories so that she can find a way to change the memory. If she can't change the memory, someone else will be named Queen next year. I feel like her main concern would be stopping her sister from dying. What is so bad about someone else being named Queen? But she doesn’t know how to change a memory of an event that hasn’t happened yet.
When Reesha disappears, Burgundy has proof the royal court was involved. She pours over every detail in her twin’s memory book looking for clues, only to discover her sister’s darkest secrets will lead her straight to where Reesha is, but in doing so, will also reveal her own dark secrets. Dark secrets is vague, and something more concrete may be more compelling. Also, if Burgundy is hiding something, I'd like to have a sense of that internal conflict much earlier in the query. To save her sister, all of these memories will come to light. Now, Burgundy must choose between following her fears, or doing what is right. The stakes could be more concrete. I'm not sure if I should be more worried about Reesha dying, someone else becoming Queen, or someone stealing Reesha's identity which was mentioned in the hook but doesn't appear to be followed up on.
Because some memories you want to live over and over again.
And some memories are best forgotten.
QUEENS OF NEXT YEAR is a contemporary fantasy young adult novel with doses of light science fiction elements that blends the unbreakable bonds of love between sisters in Disney’s FROZEN with an unreliable, plot twisting narrator seen in THE GIRL ON THE TRAIN. It weaves the point of view of both sisters, alternating chapters of present day and memory book entries, and defies the trope that siblings are always rivals. It's complete at 70,000 words. This paragraph is perfect!
Overall, I'm really intrigued by a fantasy that revolves around memories and the relationship between twin sisters adds another interesting layer. Good luck!