Cordelia loved stories more than anything. Early Sunday mornings, she grabbed Panthony the Panda and raced to the village square to beat the Story Queen’s courier to the notice board. That way, she always had first pick of the stories he posted there. But one awful Sunday, as she skidded to a halt:
[Sign on the board says: NO STORIES UNTIL FURTHER NOTICE, BY ORDER OF THE STORY QUEEN].
“Oh, no! How will I fall asleep at night?” wondered Cordelia. That night, Cordelia stared at the ceiling, wide awake. “Do you think the Story Queen is mad?” she asked Panthony. “Or sad?” Cordelia listened to the breeze Shhhhhh…Shhhhhhh… “Or sick!” Cordelia sat straight up. Sleep? Impossible! In the morning, rubbing her eyes, she dragged Panthony out of bed. “We have to find the Story Queen - before bedtime!”
She packed a bag for a big adventure.”Come on!”
First, they reached the dark woods. “Don’t worry,” Cordelia told Panthony. They stood there for a moment. Then she remembered one of her favorite stories, “The Scared Little Mouse!” The mouse had to take a journey too. It was a long journey, and he had to return before dark. “And then,” Cordelia said, “He took a deep breath and said: “Left foot first, and then the right. Use my ears and use my sight. I can do this, while it’s light – and I will make it back by night!”
Post by midenianscholar on Feb 4, 2017 19:55:41 GMT -5
I love the idea of the protagonist trying to save stories! I think right now, the structure isn't as streamlined as it could be. Relative to a picture book's length, there's a lot of space used before Cordelia leaves on her quest (which I would think is the hook of the story). Perhaps reevaluate the best place to start the story?