As the Pharoah Thutmose I lies on his deathbed, the Maahes discovers that his master wants his to take his favorite cat into the afterlife with him. Except Maahes is his master’s favorite cat and is still enjoying his life on earth to trade it in just yet, so he runs away.
Life outside the comfort of the palace wouldn’t be so bad if Anubis, the jackal-headed Egyptian guardian of Death, wasn’t determined to keep Maahes out of the afterlife. Anubis’ attempts to keep Maahes from ever coming home to his master Thutmose result in the death of the cat’s fisherman friend.
When he attempts to save his friend from endless wandering as a ghost, Maahes discovers that he has the ability to carry his friend’s soul. But Anubis isn’t about to give up and Maahes must make a choice between living for himself of carrying his friend’s soul to the afterlife.
NINE is the script for a grisly MG graphic novel set in ancient Egypt. I am the co-creator and author of the Project Mammoth: Dying Light web and print comics and have professionally published several short works of fiction (Please in the anthology My Favorite Apocalypse from Tulip Tree Press and The Farewell Kiss in The First Line literary magazine).
Highly imaginative, rollicking story! A few things: Typo(s) in first sentence. "the" Mahees v. Mahees? Replace "his" with "him." Revealing that Mahees is the cat in the second sentence is confusing to this reader. If Mahees wants to stay on earth, why does it matter to him that Anubis is trying to keep him out of the afterlife? Who is the fisherman friend? Why does he matter to Mahees? Are ghosts earth-bound? Or do they go to an afterlife? What matters more to Mahees--some day joining his master? Or "living for himself?" How does the ability to carry souls fit into the tension between the two. Love that a cat is the hero of the story. Just want to see more of sense of his cat character so the reader really cares about him.
Post by Ninja Midnight on Feb 3, 2017 21:49:24 GMT -5
I agree that this query has a lot of unanswered questions and reads a little too muddled. There's a lot of contradiction and convolution. Try to frame it as clearly as you can and as linearly as you can!