[Why I am querying them, specifically.] I am seeking representation for my dialogue-only picture book, TIGER V. BEAR. At 280 words, I believe this short and snappy book would be a hit among siblings and do well in the commercial market.
Two siblings are in for a surprise when they casually ask "who would win in a fight between a tiger and a bear?" Tiger and Bear overhear the conversation and show up to dispute the idea that they would ever fight. They wouldn't. They are best friends. Things get heated between the friends and before you know it they're on the floor wrestling. Just when you think their friendship is doomed, Shark shows up.
I have an undergraduate degree in English and worked for 8 years in the marketing communications field before making the switch to school librarianship. I'm involved in my local SCBWI chapter and am active in several critique groups.
Thank you for taking the time to read my work. I have other manuscripts available to share, if interested.
Two suggestions for your first paragraph. - Delete "I am seeking representation". It's implied and an agent will want to represent a body of work, not one story. - Delete "do well in the commercial market" unless you give a reason why (such as its conflict resolution theme).
I hope you'll post the first 250. Good luck!
Last Edit: Feb 3, 2017 15:20:25 GMT -5 by dianelandy
Post by daniellefreeland on Feb 3, 2017 19:18:07 GMT -5
Hi Melanie, thanks for sharing your query. First, I would suggest deleting 'I believe this short and snappy book would be a hit among siblings and do well in the commercial market. ' I think it's better to let Editors and agents make this decision rather than telling them. Then, you can move quickly onto your awesome hook.
I think your hook should be reflective of your story rather than telling us about it. In other words, if you overheard a conversation with someone and you wanted to tell me about it, what would you say? You might say: Two siblings argue about who would win a fight between a tiger and a bear.
Or leave this out altogether and start with A tiger and a bear overhear an argument about who would win a fight between them.
I would also include how things change when Shark shows up and what twist this brings.
I hope that helps Best of luck with this project Danielle
This sounds hilarious! I do think dialog-only picture books are difficult read-alouds, but it does work for Elephant and Piggie and Jan Thomas, both whom I love, so it's worth a shot for sure! Best of luck!