Post by journeygirl on Feb 2, 2017 20:23:58 GMT -5
This book is NOT for you. Put it down now! There is no story in this book, so don't bother looking. There's no perfectly handsome hero,
not even a flawed one. Don't bother looking for a beautiful princess nor a brave damsel in distress, they're not here, not in this book. No way! No fairy godmothers, or fairies of any sort, or elves or nymphs, no brilliant magicians, genies, wizards or any other to provide assistance to the non-existent hero and heroine, so don't bother looking I tell you. You're just wasting your time and mine. I've already told you.
AND there's no witches, vile villains, gruesome ghosts, zealous zombies nor any monstrous meanies. There are no vicious creatures from the crypt or from any other evil setting for that matter. Don't even try finding any magical woods or enchanted realms. There are no magical forests in here. How many times do I have to tell you? You won't find haunted houses, creepy carnivals or cursed pirate ships in this book.
No giant Venus Flytraps or any other crazy flesh-eating giant plants or giant 'anythings' for that matter so.... put this book down now if you're looking for an adventure or a quest or any sort of problem to solve. This is a quiet book to be read quietly in a library to nice quiet children who will not gasp or groan or giggle.
You'll find nothing magical nor adventurous nor horrible in here and even if you
Fun idea, reminiscent of a Series of Unfortunate Events. You have lots of descriptive, fun things not in the book - perhaps too many. After the second paragraph I wanted to know what the book IS about. You've really piqued my curiosity. I wish we could read more than 250 words!
Thanks for your response jjsewell, yes there may possibly be too many things listed as 'not' being in this book. I'm glad I've piqued your curiosity, but there are only 12 more words in this manuscript which is essentially the twist.
What sort of things do you envision for the illustrations? It seems to me that there must be something else happening on the pages that maybe act in contrast to the text. (If you can share without giving away your twist)
I love this concept - and I think the execution is great, too. The title definitely grabs the reader. I can see pages filled with terrific illustrations.One tiny editorial comment - 2nd paragraph: "AND there's no..." should be "AND there are no..."
Post by journeygirl on Feb 3, 2017 19:58:13 GMT -5
Hi Michael, papristr8tr and danettebyatt, Thanks for your comments, I'll make the change you suggested Michael and if any of you or anyone else has any more editorial comments I'd be most appreciative as this is only a second draft. It was a Storystorm idea that just kept flowing into a draft so I know there must be more work needed. As for illustrations I've envisaged, I'd be really happy to let an illustrator go wild and bring their own vision to this, nonetheless to answer your question, the idea of the text is that either some or all of the things mentioned are actually in the illustrations whether as full on fantasy pages OR subtly hidden in the background with them all coming together somehow in the last few pages. I wish I could give the last 12 words too, because I'd love to know if they are a surprise as hoped or a 'diprise'. (A word made up by our local morning radio hosts for an anticipated surprise that turns out to be a disappointment) although I don't think it is -of course, ha ha.