Witchy is a bad witch who and proud of it; she spends her time time scaring people and pulling pranks. But she loves her cat, Midnight. When Midnight becomes ill, Witchy is frantic and turns to a human veterinarian. After he cures Midnight, Dr. Jones doesn't want Witchy's thanks but asks: "Can you be good for three days?" But Witchy knows that she is a wicked witch--will she try? WITCHY AND MIDNIGHT, an early chapter book, is approximately 1900 words long.
Six of my essays have been published, including one as an op-ed in The Chicago Tribune, and five of my poems, including one in Poetry of Poetry of Protest: Journal of Modern Poetry 19. I am employed as a curriculum designer and writer and belong to SCBWI, KIDSCRIT critique group, and MISSING VOICE, a Facebook discussion group promoting diverse picture books.
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This sounds like a fun story! I wonder what would happen if you spent more time in the first paragraph focusing on the big decision she had to make. You've said she's a bad witch with an evil nature. i think you might be able to cut out the line about her scaring people and pulling pranks. Then you could focus those precious few words we have in a query to get to the heart of the story, which seems to be about that big decision.
This sounds very fun - I think kids would love it.
The first line though could read - "Witchy is a bad witch who and proud of it; she spends her time..." to simplify it a little.
A great query.
Good luck with this!
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