THE PARTS MENAGERIE [WIP]: YA Fantasy

liwayway
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THE PARTS MENAGERIE [WIP]: YA Fantasy Feb 8, 2019 16:40:18 GMT -5

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A time traveler, a spy, a shape-shifter, an inventor, and an assassin seek the magical pieces of a broken giant to save their world from an ancient monster. Pacific Rim meets Middle Earth. #YAFantasy

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THE PARTS MENAGERIE [WIP]: YA Fantasy Feb 8, 2019 17:12:17 GMT -5

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Post by samsamiamam on Feb 8, 2019 17:12:17 GMT -5

Sounds interesting! You've hit all the major elements. The only thing I might suggest is giving us a little more about the obstacles that get in their way as they seek the magical pieces. Is there a special place to find these pieces?

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THE PARTS MENAGERIE [WIP]: YA Fantasy Feb 8, 2019 19:40:29 GMT -5 samsamiamam likes this

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Feb 8, 2019 17:12:17 GMT -5 samsamiamam said:

Sounds interesting! You've hit all the major elements. The only thing I might suggest is giving us a little more about the obstacles that get in their way as they seek the magical pieces. Is there a special place to find these pieces?

Thank you for your time and feedback! To tackle the addition of obstacles, I was thinking about mentioning the other forces and groups that are searching for the magical pieces. I just need to figure out how to word that in a Twitter limit.

Maybe something like...

A time traveler, a spy, a shape-shifter, an inventor, and an assassin need to find the magical pieces of a broken giant before the zealous Order does to save their world from an ancient monster. Pacific Rim meets Middle Earth. #YAFantasy

The pieces are scattered and hidden in this world. My 5 characters are strangers to each other in the beginning. They find some of the pieces on their own, and finding them is the reason they meet to begin with.

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Nice to meet you! I like kindhearted thieves and am working on a book about mischief makers.

kmurphy Youngster Posts: 13	THE PARTS MENAGERIE [WIP]: YA Fantasy Feb 9, 2019 0:23:00 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by kmurphy on Feb 9, 2019 0:23:00 GMT -5 I feel you on the twitter limit. Clear stakes w/ conflict, and interesting comps; heading to your pages.

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THE PARTS MENAGERIE [WIP]: YA Fantasy

Post by liwayway on Feb 8, 2019 16:40:18 GMT -5

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Post by kmurphy on Feb 9, 2019 0:23:00 GMT -5